I am a clock
I work hard to be on time
Early not late
My gears work together to be exact
My hands tell you what to do and where to go
My alarm goes off when you are late
When I go down, I am easy to fix
I will always be there when you need the time
I have a crystal to keep my parts inside
I am quiet when I want
But when the hour comes I am not
I am small but important
Without me, no one will know the time
I am a clock
Hey mikayla!!
ReplyDeleteI felt that this poem was a very creative way of describing yourself. I also felt that something as strangel as a clock was brought to life by your poem (not that you are strange). This wasn't just one dimensional characters but many different aspects of your life. I have little to critique but I feel that you should save the crazy inspiring parts like "I have a crystal to keep my parts inside" (possibly talking about your uniqueness). Anyways awesome job!!
Keegan d.
Ayeeeeeee Mikayla.
ReplyDeleteGood Job on you poem. You poem creatively compared yourself to a clock. And instead of comparing yourself to a clock in just one way you used multiple aspects. But I agree with Keegan that you should save the part, "I have a crystal to keep my parts inside" if it is describing your uniqueness. But other than that Good Job on your poem.
Hi Mikayla,
ReplyDeleteNice job on your poem.
I'm not sure what Keegan and Aldrin meant by "save the part" about the crystal?
I agree with them that you've done a nice job of describing the different functions of a clock.
I still feel as if there should be more of your actual character in the poem, though....for example, after the line "Early, not late"...I never miss a deadline
And "my gears work together to be exact"...I revise and revise until things are perfect
Do those suggestions make sense? I'm not really saying to use those exact lines, but I'm trying to give you an idea of what I mean...
What kind of clock are you? Modern, digital? Old fashioned analog? Are you a clock radio? etc...
Great job...the video will be neat :)
mrs s
Interesting Poem, I like the diffrent takes on how to imagine the function and use of the clock itself. My favorite stanzas were:
ReplyDelete"I am quiet when I want
But when the hour comes I am not"
{and}
"I am small but important
Without me, no one will know the time"
Was this poem made for school, because a "A" is well deserved? Great Poem!