Hey Mikayla! ^___^ I like your idea and how it really relates to your poem- setting and all. And I like how you somehow incorporated a silhouette of yourself running.. this shows that you are invisible to find, which you state in your poem. However, I don't think it's necessary to put in the word 'Menehunes' in your graphic. It's pretty clear that your allusion is a menehune. Rearrange your text so that they're in the corners of the picture. For your final, you could make it less plain by adding more that relates to your poem such as.. I remember you talking about your tools.. maybe you could somehow incorporate your tools in there and somehow show more of your strengths and weaknesses or what you're known for. Other than that, you're good!
Hey Mikayla, It's nice to see that your setting really matches your allusion. I like how the text is really visible and easy to read. You say in your poem "fixing planting collecting many things to do in such a little time" maybe you could incorporate that into your graphic. So yeah, hope your final turns out great.
Hi Mikayla, I think your teammates have given good comments :) I, too, would like to see more of "you" in the graphic...watch the layout, though...you don't want it to be cluttered... and, although the silhouette is a neat idea, perhaps transparency would work, too? that way you could still convey the image of the menehune and of you, but blending in to the surroundings (invisible) mrs s
Hey Mikayla! ^___^
ReplyDeleteI like your idea and how it really relates to your poem- setting and all. And I like how you somehow incorporated a silhouette of yourself running.. this shows that you are invisible to find, which you state in your poem. However, I don't think it's necessary to put in the word 'Menehunes' in your graphic. It's pretty clear that your allusion is a menehune. Rearrange your text so that they're in the corners of the picture. For your final, you could make it less plain by adding more that relates to your poem such as.. I remember you talking about your tools.. maybe you could somehow incorporate your tools in there and somehow show more of your strengths and weaknesses or what you're known for. Other than that, you're good!
-Mel
Hey Mikayla,
ReplyDeleteIt's nice to see that your setting really matches your allusion. I like how the text is really visible and easy to read. You say in your poem "fixing planting collecting many things to do in such a little time" maybe you could incorporate that into your graphic. So yeah, hope your final turns out great.
-Sierra
Hi Mikayla,
ReplyDeleteI think your teammates have given good comments :) I, too, would like to see more of "you" in the graphic...watch the layout, though...you don't want it to be cluttered...
and, although the silhouette is a neat idea, perhaps transparency would work, too? that way you could still convey the image of the menehune and of you, but blending in to the surroundings (invisible)
mrs s